I love it.

Let me start by saying that your description of Spring was very well detailled and it gave out a amzing feel. I could almost smell the season.

I'm jealous.

We write very differently, I would be never able to explain something in that matter or write in that sort of way.

Very well done Doll.

I like your choice of words.

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PrettyPower will never be her power...

"When you hear a great song, it touches your life. it affects you, it's like a scent, it reminds you of something. you fuck to it, you feel blue to it, you feel great to it.."

-Courtney Love

OMG OMG OMG!! Thank you sooo freakin much!You have no idea how much that means to me that you like it! As I said I have never written that way. I really thought it was gonna come out like crap.You really thought my description was good? How on earth could you be jealous!? You are an amazing writer!!OMG you have no idea what the things you said mean to me. And to be honest all I did was look at a tree and write my feelins, the things I saw, out on paper. Didn't think that was really poetry, ha at least my bro has told me what I do isn't poetry.Thank you again for your amazingly compasionat words to me.

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Don't touch whats already broken

Pretty damn good try, but you might try using stanzas to give it a little more structure. Maybe something like this;

Baren trees
Dead leaves
Empty hearts
Broken promises

Life stolen away
Bitten by the frost
Frozen life
Pulsing under the snow

Old dead bark
Giving way to fresh
New born life
Dieing branches reaching
Towards the sunlight
Striving to live

The golden cleansing sunshine
Bathing the old branches
In it warm restoriative healing aura
New promises made in the starfilled twighlight

Hearts so full of love and joy
They could almost burst
New life breaking free of old restraints
Everything gloriously fresh and new

Stanzas tend to give poems a better flow when you have so many lines. Some poems work best without them, but they tend to have short sharp lines. Anyway have a fiddle with putting in stanza's to ur next few poems. Other than that, i loved the writting. You use some very nice adjectives to describe the tone and atmosphere, keep it up.

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I'm getting feelings I'm hiding too well
(Bury the horse shaped shell)
Something broke inside my stomach
I let the pieces lie just where they fell

Porcupine Tree - Open Car

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